Sample Writing report
We score Academic Task 1 reports, General Training Task 1 letters and Task 2 essays. The example below shows a Task 2 report. The essay and feedback are illustrative examples.
Task 2 · Practice estimate
Band 6.0 – 7.0
Your position is clear and your paragraphs are well organised. The main thing holding you back is that your second reason is stated but never explained.
Three changes for Band 7
- 1Explain your second reason. “Banning cars is good for health” needs one sentence on who benefits and how.
- 2Check verbs after “people” and “it”. You made the same agreement error three times.
- 3Replace “more cleaner” and “more better” with the correct comparative.
Corrections from the essay
- Many people thinks that…Many people think that…“People” is plural, so the verb is “think”.
- banning cars will makes the city…banning cars would make the city…After “will” or “would”, use the base form of the verb.
- the city more cleanerthe city cleaner“Clean” takes -er. Do not add “more” as well.
- because it have many advantagesbecause it has many advantages“It” is singular, so the verb is “has”.
Paragraph 2, rewritten at Band 7
What you wroteMany people thinks that banning cars will makes the city more cleaner. Also, banning cars is good for health. In my opinion, the government should ban cars from the city centre because it have many advantages.
Rewritten at Band 7Many people think that banning cars would make city centres cleaner, because there would be far less exhaust in the air. A ban would also benefit people's health: children walking to school, for example, would breathe in fewer traffic fumes. For these reasons, I believe governments should remove cars from city centres.
- Fixed four grammar errors without changing your ideas.
- Added one sentence that explains who benefits and how.
- Made the final sentence state your position clearly.